I have a feedback for you about the crawl text:

I wish you can give us more detail on the opening crawl.

This is my suggestion of the crawl text:

The Galactic Empire reigns.
The Rebellion desperately
struggle for their survival,
scattered across the
galaxy.

GRAND ADMIRAL THRAWN has
begun construction on a
more powerful TIE defender
elite, an upgraded fighter
with upgraded power and
speed. He has hidden the
factory for constructing
them on Lothal, a planet
located in the Outer
Rim.

As the citizens of Lothal
continue to suffer, along
with Lothal, the GHOST
CREW return to a hidden
base…