Looking to get some feedback on the title crawl I’ve put together for the rebels season 4 movie. Please give me feedback on anything from the content of the crawl to how it looks!

Crawl text:
The Galactic Empire reigns.
The Rebellion desperately
struggle for their survival,
scattered across the
galaxy.

ADMIRAL THRAWN has
begun construction on a
new TIE fighter. One that
is more powerful than the
original design. He has
hidden the factory for
constructing them on
Lothal, a planet in the
fringes of the Outer Rim.

As the citizens of Lothal
continue to suffer, two Jedi
Knights return to their small
band of rebels based on
Yavin IV…