PM sent with some initial thoughts.

All in all, brilliant fanedit and choices you have taken - like the Harfoot storyline and the structure of the opening 50 minutes (apart from some Harfoot choices) are great, and have definitive bits I will have to borrow for the re-structure of my own.

OBS! And as mentioned in PM, this is based on the first 80-90 minutes, as I want to respectfully give priority to the rest rather than have to skim through it for quick thoughts.

Brilliant, as I would suspect. ❤️