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InfoDroid
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The legendary "Starkiller Ranch" Thread
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3-Dec-2005, 7:40 AM
TheDemonHunter and MTHaslett, thank you both for your most recent wonderfully thoughtful and insightful posts. These two posts are perfect examples of the level of intellectual creativity I hope we can maintain on this thread. If we do that, I think we can really get somewhere with this.

MTH, right now I'm tidying up my edit of the Vader/Obi-Wan duel, if all goes well it should be posted by the weekend. And I'm also working on an alternate take of the Ben's Revelation scene.

This one would be structured differently, to begin straight away with Leia's message already beginning when we're seeing the exterior of Ben's Hut.

We cut inside and listen to the message with Ben and Luke.

When Leia is finished, Luke turns to Ben and asks "You fought in the Clone Wars?"

Which provokes the story of Anakin.

Then Ben says, "You must learn the ways of the Force, if you are to come with me to Alderaan."

Luke responds with, "The Force?"

Obi-Wan explains the Force, and gives him the lightsaber.

Luke waves the lightsaber around, before asking "How did my father die?" Then we get that horrific tale out of Obi-Wan, which also serves as a recap for the audience. He ends it with a simple call to action. "Learn about the Force, Luke."

Luke recoils.
"Listen, I can't get involved. I've got work to do."
"That's your uncle talking."
"My uncle... How am I ever going to explain this?"
"I need your help, Luke. She needs your help. I'm getting too old for this sort of thing."
"I can take you as far as Anchorhead. You can get a transport there to Mos Eisley or wherever you're going."
"You must do what you feel is right, of course."

This breaks everything up a little more in my opinion, so we're not so bombarded with too much information all at once. After this is complete I want to try another version of the same scene with no flashbacks, something very conservative, along the lines of what TheDemonHunter suggested. You guys can tell me which version you like better.

Until later,

--InfoDroid