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Post #1601489

Author
Grand Admiral Thrawn
Parent topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
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Date created
31-Jul-2024, 11:01 PM

You know me and my tweaks haha. I like where you are going with this, might I suggest…

Seeking to defuse this
emerging threat, daring
Senators have secretly
commissioned the pilots
of a brave RESISTANCE
to find the last Jedi and
restore the light of hope
to the darkening stars…

The reason for the tweak…

  • Make it sound more present tense
  • Make it so the leaders do not seem afraid and are actually competent
  • Make it so that it is not the Senate but only a select few that are supporting the Resistance in hopes to de-escalate the conflict.