Very bizarre that they reveal Osha and Mae are the same person, and yet they chose two very distinctly different child actors for the flashbacks.
I think I’d be most interested in an edit of this show which completely removes both flashback episodes, but still includes episode 8 - which it doesn’t look like you’re doing here. I think letting the audience decide what happened that night completely on their own is much more satisfying than whatever the hell all that was. As it stands, Torbin doesn’t have sufficient motivations to end himself, the leader of the coven is to blame for her own death by not explaining her decision upfront, and Sol doesn’t explain himself to Osha for some reason. It’s just so much easier to remove all of this problematic writing and let the audience come up with their own explanations.
One other cool change I’d like to see someone make is shifting the Plagueis cameo to the very end of the edit, so that he is watching Osha and his apprentice instead of just watching their ship take off earlier. I think it would be pretty easy to digitally paint out the ship leaving in that shot. And then completely remove the Yoda cameo, since no matter what she says to him, Yoda either becomes an idiot or complicit in all this.
EDIT: The guy above me beat me to it, lol.
I had exactly the same thought and goals but people kept asking me to include the flashbacks, which is why I’m now making this a 2 parter.
I was hoping to have Osha and Mae appear more like fight club style but the fact they were in two places at the same time and other people see them in the same place ruined that option for me. I’m not sure there is any way around editing that. My brains been fried getting it to a film length and watchable on rewatch.
I’ll have to rewatch it to see how things pan out for part 2. Right now I’m trying to rush out part 1 so people can enjoy the actual murder mystery part as a whole.