I think in “follow our mother’s path”, emphasis could be more on “mother’s”, right now it emphasises “path”.
Since it’s about contrasting their mother and father, and “father” was emphasised in the last phrase, I think it would flow better.
Post #1588195
- Author
- DrVibble
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- The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
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- Date created
- 2-May-2024, 4:33 PM