Yeah, I think it needs a little work as well.
I still think this is a good one, we are leaving the Padme reference, and the “surrendered her saber to me” is just assumed at that point. And in the current “canon”, that actually is what happened. Not that it has any firm bearing on what Hal decides, but I still think it is awesome to include.
Luke: “She was quick to learn in our training. But Leia feared the hatred that consumed our father, choosing instead to follow our mother’s path. Despite losing everything and everyone, Leia always chose compassion over hatred. A thousand generations live in you now, but this is your fight. Let Leia’s legacy guide you on Exegol."