Very good.
I’m not sure about the back shot of BoKatan right before he asks if it should be hers. Otherwise, the pacing of the lines with the visuals is great.
I agree. It really comes together when you see it paired with the visuals. However, I did think the backshot of Bo stood out slightly, but it is not a hill I would die on. Overall, you making Book of Boba Fett and Mando season three worth watching is truly…wizard!
Agreed, it’s a little bit jarring! I’ll find a substitute.
Speaking as someone who thinks season 3 of Mando completely dropped the ball. I don’t think you’ve strayed too far from the intentions of the show.
Inserting more of the Mandalorian culture is completely in line with the shows intentions. This season in particular became the season to explore what it means to be Mandalorian. Must they be from Mandalore? Must they fight? Are they a family? Is it about strength, an army, or connection? I think these questions are all explored with the original and are brought out to a much better extent with the changes you’re implementing.
I think what we see in season 3 is a rush to the finish, tapping into ideas but not fully exploring them and that leads us to rushed conclusions. E.g., Din gives the darksaber to Bo because of a technicality and she needed it to recruit her old Mandos. Whereas in your take, the darksaber is returned to Bo because she is the one designed to reunite the Mandalorians. Your take also feels more true to the overarching story of Bo Katarn AND Din. Also having Din tell this story in the critical moment enhances his character and motivations rather then dismissing them as I feel the original did.
I think the difference between the two comes through the exploration of myth (both through your armour scenes and this one) and the commitment to character arks. Your changes keep the essence of the story but enhance character, lore and story telling.
So no, I don’t think you’ve strayed far from the original at all! You’ve clearly got a passion for these changes. I’d trust that instinct and keep pushing your ideas forward!
Thanks for all the feedback. It’s a fine line to balance between trying to improve on some of the original ideas and rewriting it into something that’s no longer even the story. I want to stick close to improving while making changes that make sense.
If anything, I’d like to hear Din say “I was taught… but…” in this monologue, maybe in reference to the mask of Mandalore.
I’m not sure I’m fully tracking on this suggestion. Can you expand on your idea a little bit more?