I think the new lines work VERY well. I don’t think you should cut anything. I honestly don’t mind Din talking for a while here. With all the tension that builds up at the Season 2 Mando finale, we need a strong reason why Din and Bo don’t fight each other and I think this monologue works to explain that on a few levels.
Firstly, this monologue is a fight (both with Bo and the wider Mandalorians), so to cut it down makes the ‘fight’ easier.
Thanks for the feedback! Love the analogy of this moment being akin to a real fight, similar to how Bo-Katan just had to duel Axe Woves physically, now Din has to come in and duel him mentally. I have also sprinkled in lines throughout this film and the last one about how Din doesn’t want to fight Bo, just like at the end of Season 2. He stays consistent on this matter and has been trying to prove his point for some time, so this is the final culmination. He deserves a spotlight here.
Secondly, it helps build Din’s character. He’s no longer just traveling the galaxy solo bounty hunting. He’s lost Grogu by reuniting him with his perceived ‘family’ of the Jedi. He’s now looking to reconcile the Mandalorian’s to fill the void of not having Grogu as his family. Because of this, he’s now willing to lay down his weapons in pursuit of unity and I think this speech conveys that strongly. He wasn’t willing to do this before with Paz Vizsla but he is now. This is development that he completely missed out on in the original season 3 (although, it seems to be what they originally intended for him).
Absolutely! Great take on his characterization and growth. I think that comes across in this new speech.
I think your v2 attempt covers everything we need functionally for the story to work AND develops Din further. I think it’s awesome and you should keep it as is 😃
I am planning to cut just the two indicated lines, mostly for the sake of putting it to visuals, I don’t have infinite source footage to pull from. I have a first draft below of this new scene.
I think it sounds pretty good, but reserve judgment until seeing it with visuals which I know you say is coming. Din does sound like he has slipped an ambien sometimes, but I just think that is how his character comes across especially with a modulated voice. I think it is just more apparent in this monologue because normally he is a man of few words so such a long speech may take a little getting use to.
Wish AI could be given some prompt to put more inflection into the voice based on mood. However, I am still in awe of how far the tech has come in just a year. Really looking forward to this final book. Thanks for putting in all the hard work acbagel.
Haha, yeah Din is popping xannys on the regular for sure. So I found the longest Din monologue from the D+ show and want to show this for comparison before you watch the demo scene. This is his speech to Bo-Katan on Mandalore, a good 40 seconds of straight dialogue. Listen to this delivery first.
And then compare it to my newly drafted scene with AI + video.
I think the performances are quite close, and definitely at least believable. Maybe not a knock-it-out-of-the-park delivery from AI-Pedro, but compare it to the original show’s 18 second “speech” of You defeated that robot 5 episodes ago so here’s your darksaber, sorry for hogging it for so long… I know that as a fan of the show, I 100% would’ve preferred a slightly flatter performance that delivers the story well compared to a tad more emotional but nonsensical and disappointing explanation for the Darksaber being passed off.
Agree? Disagree? Are these worthwhile changes or straying too far from the intentions of the show?