I like how the less ambiguous line sounds, and the Anakin reference is cool. I would remove the stronger than blood line, though, it feels kind of separated from the rest of the dialogue and Rey isn’t exactly blood related to Palpatine so I feel like it doesn’t make as much sense in context. Maybe just leave a pause where that line is.
Post #1583090
- Author
- hinventon
- Parent topic
- The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant Special Edition (WIP)
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- Date created
- 22-Mar-2024, 12:27 PM