It’s close, but not perfect just yet. It just isn’t flowing for some reason I don’t know why. How about?

“She was quick to learn in our training. But Leia feared the darkness that haunted our father. She surrendered her saber to me and chose to continue our mother’s compassionate work across the galaxy. Throughout her life, Leia lost everything, but she still chose love. A thousand generations live in you now. Let Leia’s legacy be your guide."

The current version clearly states WHY Leia decides to stop the Jedi Path, we are missing that in this new take.

And if you need it shorter to fit:
“She was quick to learn in our training. But Leia feared the darkness that haunted our father. She surrendered her saber to me and chose to continue our mother’s path. Throughout her life, Leia lost everything, but she still chose love. A thousand generations live in you now. Let Leia’s legacy be your guide."