Oh. Well, like you said, I think most of the blame for the weirdness was with the second sentence. So thanks for pointing that out. I’ve been thinking of alternatives for the first sentence and nothing else conveys my intended meaning properly. For example, with your suggestion, it sounds like Luke is admitting that Palpatine made them, which I want to steer clear of.
Anyways, here is the (hopefully) final rough draft of the Vader vs. Kylo scene. There are a couple experimental things in there that I can change, if needed:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PNq604n2sbbK8_y4y0ws2MNVg6AOXffP/view?usp=sharing
I think this looks much better. I recommend getting rid of one of the forest scenes where you see the two clashing. It happens twice. Either get rid of one of them entirely or swap it with a different angle of Vader and kylo parrying/striking and I think image wise it’s perfect imo