It was just the second sentence’s structure that was wonky. My bad.
"Because you’re a Palpatine? Nobody has a right to those the Force made. Only you can choose your belonging. Some things are stronger than blood…”
And sorry, but the fun of this edit is that her and Anakin’s origin is literally something you get to choose. The audience, and Rey, get to decide just how much of a hand Palpatine had in it, because there’s no reason Luke should be able to know for sure one way or the other. Is Palps completely making it all up that he influenced how the Force made them, and they were always only made by the Force to end the Sith? Or did he perhaps empower them with more of the dark side to stop them from accomplishing their purpose and align with his own? Remember, their blood is just the raw power of the Force, nothing actually related to Palpatine himself in either case. I explained this in the description of this thread. So I don’t think I’ll be taking this particular feedback into account.