Here’s how that would sound:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZaL9WFfyBjS9Pw4eS3KpO6sptsTRkxou/view?usp=sharing
I think even in the case that Palpatine instilled an extra dose of the dark side when he ordered Rey and Anakin through the Midi-chlorian Express, they would still only belong to the Force itself, as Palpatine is not the dark side personified, he’s just all the Sith. So I think this works quite well, all things considered. It’s about detaching the will of the Force from those who try to wield it. True, Rey does choose to be a Jedi, but it wasn’t forced upon her (no pun intended) like in the case of Anakin.