I love the edited scene here! I definitely agree that chopping down the more “fanfic” aspects of the scene is wise. I did notice that Kylo’s hood fluctuates a bit, but that’s not a huge deal.
I did really like the new exchange. Maybe Vader’s line could be “We both know who is more powerful”? Seems a bit more Vadery.
And seconded on Hal’s thing, I like the idea that the Force made both of them, but maybe don’t quite spell it out.