Alrighty, I’ve incorporated everything that was recommended except for “the” throne mostly because I’d like to hear other opinions on the wording there:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZaL9WFfyBjS9Pw4eS3KpO6sptsTRkxou/view?usp=sharing

EDIT: One other thing I’d be interesting in adding is a simple “and” before “some things are stronger than blood” just to recontextualize that from a negative thing he’s talking about to a situation where her blood is powerful, AND she has the spirit to wield it properly. Although I guess it works as-is because we know Anakin’s blood has a lot of darkness in it.