That’s really good. Luke’s lines about Leia are flawless. The first dialog has room for improvements though I think.

I think there should be more of a pause between “Because you’re a Palpatine?” and “The Force made us”. Ideally even a reaction shot of Rey that answers the question before Luke continues to try and dissuade her from that notion. Right now it doesn’t really feel natural.

Also, Luke’s second line sounds a little weird to me. The first three or four times I listened to it, the “if” was almost inaudible for some reason.

And I’m not sure whether it works in the first place. It’s not quite clear what “that fate” is that Luke is talking about. I don’t have an idea for a better line though.

And finally, I feel there should also be a pause between that line and “What are you most afraid of?”