Man that’s good. It’s exposition heavy, but so is the original. The only place that stood out to me as awkward was the “Because you’re a Palpatine” line, which seems a bit out of nowhere and abrupt. In the wider context, it might work better, being a clear repetition of what Kylo told her.
Post #1576048
- Author
- vranir
- Parent topic
- The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant Special Edition (WIP)
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1576048/action/topic#1576048
- Date created
- 29-Jan-2024, 2:50 PM