I like that second line a bunch. I’m probably gonna snatch that for my own purposes: “We can end him and the Sith… and make things the way we want them to be.” But I think the fact that it is more suited for an edit like mine is exactly the proof that him giving up doesn’t work.

Again, the only problem is that Kylo really ought to have killed Palpatine without hesitation at the beginning if he just wants to hide. There has to be a reason Palpatine being alive is more favorable for him going into hiding than him being dead and going into hiding. And honestly the only one that makes sense is what Ascendant currently has at the beginning: “Kill me, and my spirit will pass into you, as all the Sith live in me”. But then you’d still have to replace Kylo’s line of “What could you give me?” with something less power hungry and also change Palpatine’s voiceover on the rising fleet to something along the lines of “Stop the girl from becoming a Jedi and I’ll let you live out the rest of your days in peace”

And at this point most of the lines are going to be AI, which is a sign that him peacing out might not be the most optimal idea.