I’ve finally cracked it, I think. This explains everything so much better than the regular Rey Palpatine:
“Rey… wherever you are… you are hard to find.”
“You are hard to get rid of.”
“I pushed you in the desert because I needed to see it… I needed you to see it… who you are. I know the darkness that lives in you, Rey…”
“You’re lying.”
“You were right… your parents were no one. Junk traders selling parts to the fleet on Exegol.”
“Don’t!”
“In exchange for a bonus on their hauls, they were assigned with raising you."
“I don’t want this!”
“Even killing you."
“No!”
“But they’d grown to care for you, so they hid you from Palpatine.”
(Rey sees the vision of her parents and her abandonment.)
“Rey, my love… be brave.”
“You’ll be safe here… I promise.”
“Come back! Nooo!”
“They paid for your protection… in more than one way.”
“Stop talking.”
“Rey… I learned what happened to them.”
(Cutaway to heroes capture)
“Your parents sought Luke’s protection, searching the Jakku desert for his allies… but Palpatine’s assassins tracked them down. They resisted fiercely, only to be forgotten by the sands of time."
(Rey sees her parents get killed.)
“So that’s where you are.”
“You know why the Emperor’s always wanted you dead. I’ll come tell you.”
…etc
“Why did the Emperor come for me? Why did he want to kill a child? Tell me.”
“Because you were one of many experiments, Rey… all of which became threats after his full return. You’re based off his template. You… are a clone of Palpatine.”
“The only purpose for your creation was to be one of his hosts on the Sith throne. But what Palpatine cannot foresee is that we’ve become a Dyad in the Force, Rey… two, linked by raw power. We can end him and the Sith, and create something new, together…”
(Removes his helmet)
“You know what you need to do. You know.”
“I do.”
By the way Hal, I’m not sure if you’ve considered the fact that this version of the movie could technically be contained in its own audio track. I’m not aware of any specific cuts you’ve made to these scenes which would warrant anything else.