I do like your modifications to the beginning. But my wording at the end is very specifically referencing the following: “Let the past die. Kill it, if you have to. That’s the only way to become what you were meant to be.”

I found it ironic how the past is quite literally coming back to life in this movie. He’s basically telling her that standing idly by isn’t going to solve her problems here. She has to confront him. Which, funnily enough, is the same advice Luke later gives her.

Here’s where I’m standing atm: “The experiments to resurrect Palpatine created Snoke, and you. But after his rebirth, Palpatine would keep the Sith throne at any cost, even his heirs. Our bond goes beyond all this, Rey. The past won’t die on its own. We must kill it. And make a new future for ourselves.”