NFBisms feedback is spot on, those were the only nitpicks I had. Otherwise overall I loved the general restructure.

I do want to chime in 2 suggestions about Andor in general:

early in Mon’s story where her husband invited Sly Moore to a party I feel like a follow up scene like in E5 Mon and her husband in the taxi would be better moved there than after the family breakfast scene.
This is a personal opinion but I think E1-3s flashbacks should be moved as 2 full flashback scenes. Cassian’s perspective with his tribe till he sees his reflection in the ship all presented before B2 wakes Andor up in the begining
And then Marva’s perspective flashback where she finds Cassian in the ship placed in the scene where she looks at Andor’s room.