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Post #1563622

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g00b
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Star Wars Rebels Recut - A Fanedit TV Series
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Date created
4-Nov-2023, 3:53 PM

TheDimitrios said:

New Intro and Credits are very nice, “artwork” looks way better.

Thanks!

In the intro there seems to be a comma misssing after “clash” and I think on the 2nd page of text there are 2 different fonts used. Maybe the pace of new sentences appearing could be tuned down just a little as well, i feel like it is a bit fast.

Oh, so there is! Good spotting! I’ll fix that up when I get the chance.

The transition between stories is better now, i still think title cards would be better. 😃 See CWRefocused s02e07.

I definitely think functionally your suggestion is better however stylistically I think my approach is more effective.

If I had the opportunity to use extra title cards in other episodes I think it would definitely work the best. However, in terms of flow and expectations it’s a bit odd to have the second episode of a series setup a style of episode and never use it again.

Although, I’ll keep this suggestion in mind!

As always, keep up the goood work!

Thanks again! You feedback is much appreciated. 😃