Hey @Nev, @JarJar made my point for me why I suggested changing from this:

Desperate to unite these
planets in RESISTANCE,
a militia armed in secret
by the New Republic has
sent its pilots in search of
the last Jedi, seeking to
restore the light of hope
to the darkening stars….

To this:

Becoming restless with
endless debate in the
Senate, New Republic
leaders have secretly
armed a brave and daring
RESISTANCE to locate
the last Jedi, hoping to
restore peace and justice
to the darkening stars…

The problem with the paragraph as you have it now, it doesn’t explain why the New Republic has to have the Resistance be secretly created. By making clear that the Senate is in endless debate, and that some of the leaders are impatient and want to act, and are going around the system makes sense in the context of the movie. It explains the reintegrated deleted scene with Leia explaining that the Senate thinks she’s crazy, and Hux’s anger about how the New Republic leaders secretly support the Resistance.

The New Republic is described as fragile in the second paragraph, but how are they together enough to support a Resistance to counter the First Order threat? There needs to be something more. I think the new paragraph helps to sell that more.

I don’t want to seem pushy, just want to help if I can. Totally understand if you are fine with how it is, it is your edit after all! 😃

JEDIT: If you want to keep pilots in the last paragraph:

Becoming restless with
endless debate in the
Senate, New Republic
leaders have secretly
tasked pilots of a brave
RESISTANCE with locating
the last Jedi, hoping to
restore peace and justice
to the darkening stars…