Overall I liked it. The only changes I would propose are morphing some shots to remove useless reaction scenes. For example, the reaction shot of Sabine during Ahsoka’s line: “Talent is a factor. (pause) But training and focus are what really defines someone’s success.” I think that most of the dialogue flows much better without these irritating breaks. I don’t have this particular clip rendered, but I did a similar edit to the spar when Sabine dismisses Ahsoka’s lesson as a joke and it helps with the scene’s flow and intensity. (Here, at approximately 1:40 https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ErHoanz2vpIC_gFcPBb25eQWRfIoF73O/view?usp=share_link)

Other than that, I would suggest removing the bit with Morgan on the bridge to stay with our heroes for that moment. So instead of:

-sighting of the ring
-Shin contacting Morgan and weapons readying up
-Sabine reporting that the fighters break up
-shot of the shuttle approaching the ring
-The eye of Sion opens fire

I would suggest keeping the mystery about the huge f*cking hyperspace ring a bit longer. So,

-sighting of the ring
-shot of the shuttle approaching
-Sabine reporting that the fighters break up
-Eye of Sion readying the turbo lasers and opening fire

Furthermore, I was a little upset that you cut Huyang’s sassy “closer please.”

Oh, and before I forget it, I feel like you could try changing the close-up shots of Sabine steering the ship through Seatos’ atmosphere. During the first close-up, the extreme 180-degree turn on the lever feels more befitting of the daring dive between the Purrgil.