I think it’s nearly perfect - except I’m going to continue to insist on replacing “warriors” with something else! Lol

I ran it through ChatGPT three times at this point asking for any suggestions and all three times it flagged that word as needing replacement. That could just be random chance, but who knows. And if you’re wondering, it seems to want to replace it with the word “forces”.

Now onto the nitpicking. I’d replace “restore” with “rekindle” only because it paints more vivid imagery. “Restore” probably fits better in place of “reforge” in the first paragraph.

As for saying “darkness” on the first line, I think it’s good to catch people’s attention, but I worry about its accuracy. I’d describe the state of the galaxy more like it’s at a crossroads or twilight. You even state at the bottom that it’s in the process of growing darker. This is why “despair” worked well, albeit it’s less flashy. I’ll think about this one some more to see if there is an alternative.