Thanks for all the comments, everyone. I do read them all, even if I don’t respond for…weeks? Yikes. Ah well. There just isn’t any news to report.

PsyGemini, I did read your comments and thank you for them! Some issues are things that I can’t change about the original, but you bring up good points, and I may take out the other ‘forgive me’ line to bring it back to V1.

It seems there’s some weirdness with ‘Starfleet’ in the crawl. I’m fine with that wording because it’s how it appears in the ESB crawl, but it does give power and presence to an aspect of the New Republic we never see, so it doesn’t need to be there.

Here’s another crawl, per tradition:

EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

It is a time of darkness.
Luke Skywalker, sworn to
rekindle the light of the
Jedi Order, has vanished.

Emboldened by the Jedi’s
absence, warriors of the
evil FIRST ORDER have
risen from the shadows
of an Imperial fortress to
subjugate distant worlds
beyond the reach of the
fragile New Republic.

To counter this threat, a
brave RESISTANCE loyal
to the New Republic has
sent its pilots in search of
the last Jedi, hero of the
legendary force that can
restore peace and justice
to the darkening stars…