I'm pretty happy with it, but I've always learned that you should always be open to suggestions.
The cuts i've made during the Palpatine/Mace duel limit the amount of awkward facial expressions and a few uncoordinated looking moves by Ian with a lightsaber.
Palpatine: Master Windu, I take it General Grevious has been destroyed then.....I must say you are here sooner than expected.
Windu: In the name of the Galactic senate of the Republic you're under arrest Chancellor.
Palpatine: Are you threatening me master Jedi?
Windu: The senate will decide your fate.
Palpatine: I am the senate.
Windu: Not yet.
Palpatine: It's treason then.
*Edit* Palpatine spins through the air, lands and instantly stabs a Jedi, instead of the momentary delay. Also while Windu and Palpatine are fighting, some of Palps facial expressions are removed, and a few snippets which make Palpatine appear to be much more graceful with a lightsaber.
everything else remains the same up until the dialoge starts again:
Windu: You are under arrest my lord.
Palpatine: Anakin, I told you it would come to this, I was right, the Jedi are taking over.
Windu: The opression of the Sith will never return, you have lost.
Palpatine (removed no,no) no, you will die (shooting lightning).
(removed the Mace/Palp dialogue "He's a trator, he's is the traitor") small cuts to remove wording the dialogue.
Palpatine: (Palps transforming) I have the power to save the ones you love (removed "you must choose")
(Removed "don't listen to him Anakin")
Palpatine: Don't let him kill me...I can't hold it any longer, I can't, I'm weak, i'm too weak....Help me, help me.
Windu: I'm going to end this one and for all.
Anakin: you can't, he must stand trial.
Windu: he has control of the senate and the courts, he's too dangerous to be kept alive.
Palpatine: Oh, don't kill me please.
(removed, it's not the Jedi way)
Anakin: He must live.
Palpatine: please don't.
Anakin: I need him.
Palpatine: Please don't.
Anakin: no!
Anakin slices off Mace's hand (I totally removed palpatine yelling "power.....unlimited power" remaining is Windu being zapped by lightning then flying out the window to his death.
(removed "what have I done?")
Anakin slumps down...palpatine rises.
Palpatine: You are fulfilling your destiny Anakin......become my apprentice.
(removed "I will do whatever you ask")
(removed "gooood"
Anakin: just help me save Padme's life, I can't live without her.
Palpatine: To cheat death is a power only one has achieved, but if we work together, I know we can discover the secret.
Anakin: I pledge myself to your teachings.
revoved/cut the first "good", kept the second one in
Palpatine: The force is strong with you....a powerful sith you will become, henceforth, you shall be known as darth.....vader.
(removed "thank you my master"
Palpatine: rise...
removed yoda feeling the disturbance
Palpatine: because the council did not trust you my young apprentice, i believe you are the only Jedi with no knowledge of this plot.....when the Jedi learn what has transpired here, they will kill us along with all the senators.
Anakin: I agree.
Palpatine: The councils next move will be against the senate.....every single jedi (removed "including your friend obi-wan kenobi") is now an enemy of the republic.
Anakin: I understand master.
Palpatine: we must move quickly, the jedi are relentless, if they are not all destroyed it will be civil war without end.....first i want you to go to the jedi temple, we will catch them off-balance, do what must be done lord vader, do not hesitate, show no mercy, only then will you be strong enough with the darkside.
(removed "to save padme" since Palps just stated he didn't know the secret yet.)
Anakin: what about the other Jedi spread across the galaxy?
Palpatine: their betrayal will be delt with.....after you have (replaced "killed" with "eliminated") all the jedi in the temple, go to the Mustafar system, wipeout viceroy gunray and the other seperatist leaders
(removed "once more, the sith will rule the galaxy")
Palpatine: and we shall have peace.
This was by far the most difficult section of the movie to edit because some of the uneven dialogue had to be left in, this is what i've come up with so far, if anyone has some other interesting variations i'd love to hear them.