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Post #155695

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Pagz
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Episode 3: Fan Editing Ideas Discussion
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16-Nov-2005, 4:22 PM
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Anakin: Master Windu, I must talk to you.
Windu: Skywalker we have just recieved word that Obi- Wan has destroyed General Greivous...we're on our way to make sure the chancellor returns emergency power back to the senate.
Anakin: He won't give up his power, I just learned a (removed terrible) truth.....I think Chancellor Palpatine is a sith lord.
Windu: A sith Lord?....how do you know this?


I really like where this edit is heading. In my case, I would remove the "I just leanred" as well, if possible. To me "I just learned a truth" sounds clunky, not as clunky as terrible truth granted, but still clunky.

Just my two cents. Also, I know I'm certainly interested in hearing your edits to the confrontation scene.