I like the shortened dialogue between Baylan and Hayle. In fact, I played around with the same scene today. I was struggling with the loose “Sakris…” line because, without the rest of the line about the empire, the shot of Hayle is very short. I ended up removing that piece of dialogue too and reduced the line to:
“Scan these imposters for identification.”
Can you upload that scene individually here on the thread, to compare the result? If not, can you send me a PM?