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Post #1556810

Author
Peter Pan
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Asokha Radical Redux Ideas thread
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Date created
25-Sep-2023, 6:11 PM

Today I tackled the training sequence and tried to tighten it up. I cut some superfluous dialogue as well as repetitive action and eliminated odd pauses during dialogue.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ErHoanz2vpIC_gFcPBb25eQWRfIoF73O/view?usp=share_link

Let me know what you think.