g00b said:
Writing the opening crawls is the element I’ve found the most challenging and every new revision I’ve tended to change or tweak them.
What have you thought about the quality of them in the V4?
I’ve tried to avoid a more grand view of what’s going on. Rebels is a much quieter and smaller scale affair then Clone Wars so I’m not sure that suggestion would suit it. But I’m always open to reworking them 😃.
When you describe the font, I’m not sure what feedback you’re giving. Were you saying you prefer Eddie’s font and setup over mine? (That’s how I’m reading it but I’m not 100% sure).
I understand. I’m no writer but I can imagine it’s tough writing something in a completely foreign style.
Not sure how the quality of v4 compares to v3, since I have no comparison at hand. For season 1 I’ve been watching your recolour v4 and I can’t really see a difference in writing to v3 of season 2 and onwards. Most of the time the issues are repeated words, at the beginning of sentences/paragraphs, which should be avoided at all cost.
I would also completely remove any mentions of what characters are thinking. Intentions are debateable, since it is, as you said, on a smaller scale than clone wars, but thoughts of a character should be omitted.
Overall I do like them and I think they are needed for additional information or to explain things that might have been cut, although the writing style does not remind me of Star Wars and immediately brings me out of the immersion.
Out of interest, I put your first opening into ChatGPT and told it to rephrase it in a style similar to the star wars opening crawls:
Original:
"The Empire has ruled the Galaxy for 14 long year.
As each year passes, the Empire expands it’s territory to more and more systems.
The Empire consistently abuses and subjugates the people who occupy their planets.
On Lothal, a planet located in the outer rim, a young boy Ezra Bridger lives alone.
His mother and father were taken from him by the Empire for speaking out against them.
He has stolen and scavenged to survive. He grows tired of Imperial control."
Chat GPT:
"In a galaxy gripped by the iron fist of the Empire, a reign of dominance has endured for a grueling period of 14 years.
With each passing year, the Empire relentlessly extends its reach, annexing system after system. Amidst this oppressive regime, the Empire ruthlessly exploits and subjugates the inhabitants of its conquered planets.
On the distant world of Lothal, nestled within the outer rim, a solitary figure emerges from the shadows - a young boy named Ezra Bridger. Bereft of family, his parents cruelly snatched away by the Empire for daring to voice dissent, Ezra survives through pilfering and scavenging. Yet, a growing weariness festers within him, a weariness born from the shackles of Imperial control."
The 2nd version reads a lot more “Star Wars”-y. It does embellish quite a lot, is rather long (and should be shortened) but in my mind it sounds more like something the Clone Wars narrator would say.
Regarding the font: Eddie’s font is a bit smaller and more narrow. In my opinion it looks a lot better on a TV screen from afar, compared to your bigger and bit thicker font. Though that’s probably entirely up to preference.
g00b said:
Toastb said:
Episode 3 of season 1 “Old Masters”: The audio is not in sync with the video, not sure by how much but it was a few ms behind. Had to correct it manually.
I had some time to check the audio and it seems fine to me. Are there any points in the episode where it stands out? And like I mentioned above, do you know what version and which release? 😃
Odd. I’m pretty sure it’s a few ms out of sync. The episode is fairly action-heavy, so it’s mostly noticable at the start of the episode during the lightsaber training on the ship. I have a 4k recolour v4 of that episode dated 26/07. Not sure how recent that is.
Currently at Season 3 and I really liked what you did with the Maul episodes.
