I’d try to generally aim for fewer, longer sentences instead of a of shorter ones.
I’ll keep that in mind for the crawls as I’m putting them together with the AI. The shortest sentence for episode 1 is It is a time of oppression. Which I quite like hahaha.
Not sure how I feel about the capitalization. I know Eddie did that, but only for the first time a new place or major character is introduced.
Honestly, I wasn’t too fond of it either… but the original crawls use it so if I’m going for immersion I think it’s needed.
I don’t want to copy Eddies formatting… so maybe I’ll limit myself to one capitalisation per screen of text limited to important people/faction/location.
For example:
On another note, I love your custom helmet intro.
Thanks! It took a bit of blender work!