Toastb, I’d love to hear what you think about this potential rework of the text in the first episode.
Toastb, I’d love to hear what you think about this potential rework of the text in the first episode.
Great! It’s a definitive improvement in my opinion.
Though I’d try to generally aim for fewer, longer sentences instead of a of shorter ones.
Not sure how I feel about the capitalization. I know Eddie did that, but only for the first time a new place or major character is introduced.
On another note, I love your custom helmet intro.