I think we could actually cut “Let her approach” because right after that he’d say “She will come. Her friends will follow.”
The reason I put that is because he is actually giving Pryde an order for him to respond with “Yes, my lord”. Otherwise, Palps is just going off about his plan and Pryde just chilling there like, “Yup, okay”.
EDIT: That is a small issue I had with this edit since lines about him destroying a world were removed.
EDIT2: Plus, it makes sense to have it with the Final Order offices commenting on her: “She’s on approach. All ships rise to deployment altitude.” They ‘know’ she is going to take the throne, so they are preparing to leave when she arrives.