Thanks for the feedback everyone! Haha, and thanks Jar Jar! Honestly I just spend way too much time thinking about this stuff.

The “And you” version I just slapped together quickly because the reading came to me. I’m curious if people would prefer that line reading if I nailed it down, or like the v1 line reading. Again, not based on quality but just the line alone.

And that’s a good point krlozdac, but my train of thought was like Jar Jar’s. Finn’s story planted the seed. But, I don’t think they ever collectively planned to defect. Them laying down their weapons just sort of happened in the moment. Maybe Finn’s story planted a seed of morality in them, and it began taking roots, and then bloomed suddenly. It’s like, before hearing about Finn, they may have slaughtered those civilians. But it awoke their consciouses.

EDIT: Also, is the new shot okay?