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Post #1554888

Author
NeverarGreat
Parent topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
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Date created
16-Sep-2023, 11:15 PM

I think the first line sounds pretty great now.

The second line is a bit rough, but more for the words rather than the execution.

“We laid our weapons down.”
“All of you?”
“Yes, like you did! I don’t even know how it happened.”

Or if that doesn’t work, I think just deleting the second line and keeping the lines about how Finn started something and the troopers were following his example manages to get the point across.