I’ve not finished your book 2 as yet so can’t compare but one thing in the BoBF that bothered me was that Boba left Fennec to sort out the person involved with killing his tusken family at the end of the show, then she anticlimactically just leaves through the door. I addressed that with an alternate ending idea which might interest you.

I Have my own edit that frames Cad Bane as the one who was hired to kill the tuskins, which is why he takes so much pride in taunting boba about it. I altered the convo so go as follows:

Boba: “I will only negotiate with the head of the Pyke Synidcate.”

Cad: NEW AI LINE “You mean the one who hired me to murder your tuskin family”.

This way Boba gets his vengeance and ties Cad into the main story.