Here’s how that latest one from DZ might sound, then:
Pretty solid, but the “I had begun to train her” doesn’t quite work IMO, 'cause she definitely seems to have been in training for at least a decent amount of time. I still think a simple “it was a night in our training” could work better here.
Also, “through Senate diplomacy” could work better than just “diplomacy”, 'cause as someone said, the jedi were always kind of diplomats as well.