The original AI Kylo line which mentions a clone sounds like 90% there now:
https://youtu.be/_jqCt9AEKIc?si=wNtouPpATk2eFLEx
Since it sounds so close to his other lines we could also replace “What could you… give me?”
As for why this is necessary, I am of the opinion that the vat of clones is easy to miss for a first time viewer. I had to go back and point it out to those watching with me. Also, it’s not really as if Kylo is breaking the fourth wall here and “reading the script”. He’s literally seen the other clones, and can put two and two together to make things clearer for the audience.
That’s significantly better. It matches more with the delivery of the line afterward. That being said? I’m thinking now the clone part is a bit much. I get the thought process but visually the film shows off the clones in a way that’s pretty clear. Maybe you can play around with different wordings like “You’re a ghost from a bygone era.” or “You’re a withered relic.” or maybe use a word like “shell” in place of clone.