For Kylo’s AI line, I reduced its pitch by a decent amount before giving it to Hal. I wonder if it might have helped to pitch up the line present in the original film to help bring them in line with each other?
For Leia’s saber line, my thinking was that “Rey, never be afraid of who you are” speaks only to the idea that there is an inner darkness in her that she should have the courage to face. Whereas with the added line, it gains a second meaning in that Leia is telling her that she’s a Jedi and she should never doubt that about herself. Which ties in with her modified one-liner to Palpatine: “I am a Jedi”. She’s repeating what Leia directly told her.
That could’ve worked. The problem is primarily that the AI line sounds right as in it sounds like Adam Driver as Kylo and matches his speaking style but it doesn’t sound like it came from the movie and thus my attention is turned to how the line is clearly added. I think if the audio clip was edited to maybe match how Kylo’s voice sounds in this scene? It would’ve turned out better.
As for the Leia line? That’s a real good explanation and I definitely get where it’s coming from. It also in a way turns Luke’s line later on when he catches the saber into a nice little callback. It’s just in execution, it feels tacked on. As in I don’t think the movie gives enough to make the exchange work and instead I feel it takes more away than when it’s silent. Maybe if the line “Never be afraid of who you are.” was altered it’d be better but as it is? You kind of have an instance where it feels the scene’s being undercut a tad.