Wow, that is a radical change. But on paper atleast I think it sounds great at my first read through it!
If you’re able to pull it off seamlessly that is, then this sounds potentially incredible.
I think the main thing here to consider is that (IMO atleast) if the edits aren’t near “invisible” then the story may not hit the way that it should.
But if you’re able to properly get grpgu out of those storyline in the way you outlined seamlessly then it sounds incredible.