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Post #1539823

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Lifeincontext
Parent topic
The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE]
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Date created
19-May-2023, 11:03 AM

EddieDean said:

Actually, overnight I had a little idea for how to improve it, and made a few orderings:

I think #5 is best, using zoom levels of the camera to connect them.

I REALLY love the moment. Fantastic way to integrate that beat.

If I may offer my feedback, I do feel like timing on the cuts (even in #5) isn’t quite right. On a Force connection, there’s a rhythm to it, and right now, something’s a little off. Maybe it feels like the flashbacks linger a tad while the present moment cuts too fast? More “balance” as it were, lol.

That all being said, we probably have different editor’s eyes. Excited to see where you land!