Spence, long time, no speak. Glad to see you’re doing this.
Honestly, I like most of your changes here, brother!
I prefer Yoda not fight at all if I can throw my two cents in. I think I agree, that Yoda is one too many things going on.
I would make one minor edit to the landing platform scene. I’ve always cut, “I’ve failed you, Senator,” as it makes no sense. That’s precisely what a decoy does. Dumb writing in my opinion.
This is shaping up great! Keep it up!
Hey! Yeah, that’s actually a good point. You could boil it down to a dying person being unreasonable with their last words, but I agree it might not make too much sense. However, cutting from before that line to Padme’s “no” might not fit right either, so I’d rather have the line if it makes the scene flow better.