I was watching V2 of this edit last night for a lil May the Fourth celebration and I had a couple of ideas that I think might be worth thinking about:

The opening crawl.
As it stands the first paragraph of the opening crawl reads:
```
Flames of rebellion burn across the galaxy. The tyrannical First Order has retaliated 
by attacking any planetary system that supports their enemy.
```
I would suggest changing it to:
```
The spark of hope burns! Following the heroic sacrifice of Jedi Master Luke Skywalker, the tyrannical 
FIRST ORDER silences endless acts of insurrection across the galaxy.
```
Why?
1. Because it sets up that Luke was directly responsible for inspiring the galaxy, which in turn sets up the puppet show, and more importantly the civillian fleet at the end.
2. Mentioning that the First Order is silencing insurrection informs why Poe believes the galaxy has given up fighting when talking to Zorri. It also plays into the theme of “They win by making you think you’re alone”.
3. The fact that the insurrection is ‘endless’ gives the First Order desperation, which adds motivation on why Kylo is so bent on finding help from the hidden power.
Revert the way Mustafar was edited in V1, without Vader’s castle.

Why?

I know this will be an unpopular opinion but I think the inclusion of Vader’s castle offers more questions than answers for an unsupecting viewer. For one thing, we only see it in one shot and it’s not further explored in any way. We just see Kylo Ren kill people in a forest nearby and grab an evil artifact. The movie doesn’t explain the relationship between Vader and that artifact until much later in the movie, and when it does it’s only implied. Even then, the movie doesn’t explain the relationship between Vader and that castle. You have to fully rely on your knowledge from other media (not even the saga movies) to understand the significance of that castle. This is all to say, it’s a great shot conjured by this great community but I think it’s potentially confusing and arguably hurts the pacing.
Add new AI voice of Rey that smooths transition from Palpatine smiling at being ask “Who is she?” to Rey floating in Ajan Kloss.

Why?

I’ve always felt it was weird to do a cut to black in Star Wars since I first saw TROS (although that is the least of its editing issues). Now that the question to “Who is she?” is followed by Rey floating and asking the Jedi to “Be with me”, I think we could take advantage of that black screen and add Rey saying something like “Masters. I’m the last of the Jedi. Please. I need your guidance. Be with me…” and then the rest of the scene plays out. This I think might help smooth the transition and thematically it also answers, in a way, Kylo Ren’s question of “Who is she?”. Well “the last of the Jedi” (even though I know they’re really refering to her lineage).

Anyway most of the other stuff is the AI voices previously suggested in this thread.