May the Book 4th be with you. Links sent!
Just read this whole thread. Very interesting seeing all the changes and loved reading EddieDean’s input - such a brilliant SW mind.
Indeed, Eddie has come in clutch through this whole series, helping me catch bugs in my drafts, pitching new ideas and radical changes. Brings in so much experience from the Clone Wars project he mastered, it’s been great to bounce ideas off him and has improved this saga significantly.
Acbagel, I’d like to see the latest versions of these that you have done, please
And I have a suggestion for season 03, re the Pershing episode. Since many of us agree that it was well-written and handled well, I think enough of it (with some judicious trimming) can work. Cut the ep in blocks and spread the scenes between what is going on in Nevarro/Mandalore, with Mando, Bo-Katan, etc. Then have the final scene in this story be Kane lobotomizing Pershing. That’s your final beat. That is the why of that story. THIS is how awful the Empire is. You can’t escape. You can never escape. Even if you try. Once you’re in, there is no out.
I did have it interwoven throughout the whole film like you mentioned, up until the last episode of Mando Season 3 came out and there was no tie in at all to the larger story. The problem is that I have already intercut Din’s solo adventures and Grogu’s training into an A/B plotline through the first half of the film. Having an A/B/C plot structure with Pershing in there when Pershing never ties back into the A & B plots was super distracting. Which is a shame, because as I’ve said, I really liked those scenes. Maybe I’ll get a new spark of creativity and find a solution, but I need to get a better hold of my Season 3 film top to bottom first. It’s already looking on the ong end and I need to go through everything from scratch and decide what is needed to tell a focused narrative.
Got the links and I want to start watching very soon!!
I realized that I worded it confusingly. My idea was that the final bit with him being lobotomized would tie in with the happy-ish endings the others got. Remembering the sequence, throw Pershing’s in to the mix. Go from like worst to best… so Gideon burns up, then we go to Kane lobotomizing Pershing – his knowledge of what Gideon used his research for (which he talked about to Din about it during their fight) – going with his mind, then to the Mandalorian ceremony, Mando working for Carson, Nevarro, Mando/Grogu on the land. Boom! It’s now all tied together.
Thank you both for the kind words. It’s been a privilege working with Acbagel, who has impeccable technical skill and a real eye for the fine detail of making each scene feel great.
You deserve it.
Acbagel, I really think it’s worth considering making two films. Your early intercutting sounds great, I think you really could close out that sequence with the pirate king content, as it’s such a punctual high that changes the status quo and feels earned.
And while Pershing’s content isn’t massively linked to the main plot, it IS at least foreshadowing for the reveal of Gideon’s clones.
Agreed! And I think my idea above gives the pay-off to the why of his story. As well as really, really bringing home the evils of the Empire at this point.
I strongly urge you to consider this!
What he said!