You have some very solid ideas here! The VFX work you did in that sample clip is fantastic — what software are you using for that?
Thanks! I’m using DaVinci Resolve, gotta love free software.
Can I make one suggestion? You could easily remove the pirates from chapter 17, as the over-acting was awful, and the generic “leave one guy alive to escape” was very poorly written. The first introduction to the pirates can come from chapter 21.
This is something I had been considering. Pros of that sequence were the space battle and—this is admittedly more personal taste—Gorian Shard is the right level of Star Wars camp for me. You’re right though about the over-acting from the other pirates, and the chapter might be too long with everything it’s covering, so if I trim it down that’s definitely something I’ll consider removing.