I tried to get the line delivery as close as possible to the originals:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OBZW0HmX89FXHnTX5oeE6LPTBvG6aETo/view?usp=sharing (updated)
https://drive.google.com/file/d/12jaAdFLXU51RVqZURTiYbYVW6kZJqOAN/view?usp=sharing
It’s up to Hal now if he wants to use it. Personally, I think that this helps bring some cohesiveness between TLJ and TROS, as well. This way we have an in-film acknowledgement that it is a real technique in the Star Wars galaxy that’s been around for awhile. Glad he removed the “Holdo maneuver” line because it implies she’s the one that invented it. You’re seriously telling me nobody thought of doing it before? lol.