So far, I’ve watched up to the 501’st legion. I like this idea, and you have done a great job making the story more interesting. So far, the 501st Legion is my favorite edit, and I think it had the potential to save the origin of the 501st for people who might not have liked those episodes before.

I also had this idea; you don’t have to do this. This is my opinion, but I think the 501st legion could have been a great first episode. Considering that this story is about the Clone Wars, it would have been cool if Lucas and Filoni had started the series with an episode about clones, the 501st, no less. Also, I don’t think the Malevolence or Gunray Arc is important. I know it technically has some character development for Ahsoka. Still, to me, it’s not done that well to the point that I don’t notice it as any character development. But it’s up to you.

Tracking back to the 501st Legion, I think it’s close to being a great edit. These are just a couple of bugs I noticed that, if fixed, could elevate the edit, in my opinion.

I feel like it’s a little weird to put the scene with Echo and Fives meeting Shakti so close to the beginning as you did. I think I can hear where you added fives saying “echo.” I assume to make the story congruent and not have any nameless characters immediately, but I think it might be better to have that somewhere else.
I like that you started the episode with the pan over Kamino and the Bounty hunter instructor yelling at Domino Squad. Still, I think the transition might be smoother if you had the bounty hunter’s voice coming in while we watch the pan over Tepoka city.
Some transitions seem quick like they don’t feel smooth or natural. I don’t think this is your fault. I think it’s just the nature of how the episodes were made since Clone Wars wasn’t edited that well, to begin with. But if you can find a way to make the transitions a little slower and smoother and help the characters interact and deliver their lines more slowly and smoothly, I think it will help. Also, when I watch episodes about Domino Squad and members of the 501st, I like to watch those as if 5s and Echo are the main characters—their story from Domino Squad to Echo’s death at the Citadel to 5s discovery of the inhibitor chips. I think it would help if you minimized Heavy and Cut Ups rolls in the story to draw more attention to 5s and Echo. I don’t know if this could work, but maybe you could cut out the Domino Squad episode and start with the base episode.
This isn’t your fault, but 99’s story is rough. In the invasion of Kamino, he gets an arc trooper killed by running around and distracting him, and then he almost makes 5s shoot a bunch of young clones. Also, his death is dumb. There is a hallway on the other side of the barracks where he could have run, but instead, he ran right in front of the droids and was just an obvious target. I see what they were trying to go for, but it wasn’t done well. And the part where their hiding in the barracks seems a little awkward given the 5s or Echo just asked 99 where to got to get a better shot at the droids, but then when the trainees show up saying they were going to the barracks for some reason they all go there and one of the clones gives this lame speech. There’s not much you can change about that, but I think cutting straight from “we were headed to the barracks” to the clone ambushing the droids in the barracks with the trainees popping out of the sleeping pods I think would be a little cooler. Another thing with this episode is when a Rex tells 5s and Echo that they showed strength and valor, and then “reminds me of me actually.” I can’t tell if he’s joking or if the writers wrote that line without noticing how arrogant that sounded. That being said, the invasion of Kamino is pretty cool.

That’s all I can think of for the 501st episode. But I have other things that aren’t bugs, just personal opinions.

I think the words at the beginning of the episode, “Conflicts arise…” is cool in the first episode, but it becomes a little redundant after a while. Also, I wonder if you should put more subtle music behind the words at the beginning to make them easier to read. I go back and forth on this because I like how the title comes in on the drop.

I think that’s all I have for now. I hope I don’t sound like a jerk. Your edit is great, and I think your idea is brilliant. Thanks for putting in all this hard work and positively contributing to the fandom. This is a fan edit I’ve wanted someone to do since I finished my first watch-through of the CW, so I appreciate what your doing here. Sorry for the long post.

May the Force be with You.